What I Learned
Completeness: partial · Depth: surface
This section is too general. Instead of 'Ilearn a lot fun facts about human & body,' the student should list two or three specific facts with full sentences. Example: 'I learned that the left lung is smaller than the right lung, and that people lose about 4 kilograms of skin cells every year.' This would show deeper understanding.
My Favorite Part
Completeness: complete · Depth: fair
The student answered all three articles, which is good. The human body part is mostly accurate: 'Left Lung is smaller than our Right lung' is true, but 'We have many blood' is unnatural. Suggest: 'There is a lot of blood in our bodies.' For Josh: 'Josh kert practise very hard to broke the World Record' → 'Josh Kerr trained very hard to break the world record.' The cycling part is clear and personal: 'I think we should cycle instead of riding in cars.'
New Words
Completeness: complete · Accuracy: fair
Good attempt to use 'shattered' correctly: 'Josh had shattered the World Record.' For the second word, 'He felt nerves nervous and his face goes blush' needs correction: 'He felt nervous and his face turned red.' Also, 'blush' can be used as a verb: 'He blushed.' Try to use each new word in one clean, natural sentence.
Draw It
Completeness: complete
The labels 'Human Body,' 'Josh kerr,' and 'cycle' show drawings for all three articles, which matches the assignment. The human body drawing probably included labeled parts, and Josh Kerr and a bicycle were illustrated. Next time, add a sentence describing what was drawn and what it shows.
charlotte kitty
What I learned
Ilearn a lot fun facts about human & body, like our
mouth, heart, brain, etc.
The interesting Part.
① Human's body part is so interesting. Our heart is very
strong. We have many blood. Left Lung is smaller than
our Right lung-----
② Josh kert practise very hard to broke the World
Record. He is my hero.
③ Cycling can make us healthy. I think we should
cycle instead of riding in cars.
New word
1. Josh had [shattered] the World Record.
2. He felt nerves nervous and his face goes blush.
draw
Human Body
Josh kerr
cycle
Charlotte clearly understood the main ideas from all three articles: the human body facts, Josh Kerr's record, and why cycling is good for health. However, the writing is often choppy and contains tense, article, and word-choice errors. For example, 'Ilearn a lot fun facts' should be 'I learned a lot of fun facts,' and 'We have many blood' should be 'We have a lot of blood' or 'The body has a lot of blood.' For the favorite part, 'Josh kert practise very hard to broke the World Record' should be 'Josh Kerr trained very hard to break the world record.' The vocabulary section shows a good attempt to use 'shattered' correctly, but 'He felt nerves nervous and his face goes blush' needs revision: 'He felt nervous and his face turned red' or simply 'He blushed.' The drawing labels show she connected her drawings to all three articles. Focus next on using complete, natural sentences and checking verb tenses before submitting.
| Original | Correction |
|---|
| Ilearn a lot fun facts | I learned a lot of fun facts |
| human & body | the human body |
| The interesting Part. | The interesting part: |
| Human's body part is so interesting | The human body is so interesting |
| We have many blood. | We have a lot of blood. / The body has a lot of blood. |
| Left Lung is smaller than our Right lung | The left lung is smaller than the right lung. |
| Josh kert | Josh Kerr |
| practise very hard to broke | practiced very hard to break / trained very hard to break |
| He felt nerves nervous | He felt nervous |
| his face goes blush | his face turned red / he blushed |
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